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Posted by jmalouin7 - May 28th, 2009


`*~>Fixed grammar, and spelling, let me know if you spot something<~*'

I have never really told this story, but i figured, what the hell, why not. It is completely true, minus some name changing. It may actually make me feel better if I do, so here it goes. This story is about me, and....well just read.

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Sophie was a very beautiful girl. She had long, dark, curly hair, Bright blue eyes, and incredible smile. She was a very outgoing person, who never judged. She had her best friend Jason, and the love of her life, a girl named Sarah. She had tons of friends in school, as she was very popular.

Jason was Sophie's best friend. He would do anything for her, as she would do anything for him. He has short blond hair, and blue eyes. He always tried his best to keep out of trouble, but it always seemed to catch up to him. This was ok with him because he always had Sophie to help him out when he needed it.

Each day, Sophie would wake up, pick up Sarah, and drive to school. They would meet Jason in the same hallway, talk for a little, and all go to class. After school, Jason and Sarah, would all go to Sarah's house, as Sophie worked.

Sarah was everything Sophie loved. She had short blond hair, Dark eyes, and was very playful. They had been together forever. They would always text each other during school, and call each other late at night, when they were not together.

Sophie's birthday was coming up, so each night that she had to work, Jason and Sarah would get together and plan her party out. They would talk about decorations, who to invite, presents to get, and where to hold it. She was turning 18, and wanted just a small party of close friends and family.

The time came. School was done, and Sophie was at work, like usual. Jason met up with Sarah, and together they began setting up for the party. Sarah started with the decorations, as Jason called everyone who was coming. The decorations were done, so Jason and Sarah decided to get their presents ready. Sarah got her a gold necklace, which was engraved "Together, Forever". Jason had gotten her a golden bracelet.

It was 8 pm, and Sophie was just finished work. She called Sarah, said she was going home, and she couldn't wait to see her. Her family, and a few friends were altogether, waiting for her to show up. They were all getting impatient, saying "where is she" or "what's taking her so long?". Sarah didn't worry because Sophie was usually a bit late.

A couple minutes later, Jason sent Sophie a text message.

"Hey, where are you? We are all waiting for you"

There was no response. This worried Jason, because Sophie was always quick to respond.

A few minutes later, the phone rang, Sophie's mom picked up. Her facial expression changed, she became very worried. After the phone was put down, she bursts into tears.

"Sophie is in the hospital" She screamed "They found her car in the ditch"

As soon as that message got out, Sarah bursts into tears. Sophie's parents instantly left, and headed to the hospital. Jason and Sarah went with them.

They got there, and rushed into the hospital. They ran to the nurse at the front desk.

"WHERE IS SOPHIE?!?!" her mom screamed "I am Judy Rose, Sophie's mom, I want to see my daughter!"

The nurse had a worried look on her face "follow me" she said, in a low voice.

They go to her room. She was hooked up to several machines. Tubes and wires were coming and going in all directions, all over her body. Every second one of the machines would beep, as it showed her heart beating.

Sarah couldn't stop crying. She sat there, and just watched as the love of her life was relying on machines to keep her alive. Jason could only watch, he was silence, scared to say a word. Sophie's mom was sobbing, hugging Sarah.

Sophie's dad was outside, he couldn't ever see his daughter like that. She was daddies little girl, and he loved her so much. He would put down his life for her, and to see her in a state where she was helpless, and he couldn't do anything to help, tore him apart.

At this time, a doctor walked in.

"Hi, my name is Dr. Kevin Stevenson, I would like to talk to you privately."

He closed the door to the room.

"I would like to talk to you about Sophie. She was in a horrible accident. We put her into a medically induced coma, so she would no longer feel her pain. We did the best we could, but she will not make it through the night. If you are catholic, we can provide a priest to give the last rites. If not, you now have time to say your good-byes."

At this time, the doctor left.

Her dad collapsed as he broke down into tears. He was losing the one person who he truly loved, and it killed him that there was nothing he could do. Sarah, and Sophie's mom were already in tears, as Jason was trying to hold it together. As much as he tried, he just couldn't do it. He broke down, as he was watching his best friend slip away from him. No matter what he did, she was leaving him tonight, and he couldn't stop it. He had known her since he was Three years old, and they did everything together. All those thoughts, all those happy times, all those emotions, were all going through his head, and he couldn't take it. He left the room, unable to look at her, and unable to handle the situation. He always was comforted by Sophie, and this time she was not going to be there.

Together they waited, watched, and mourned, as soon they all loved dearly, left them. Every one of them saying their good-byes.

"Good-bye Hun, you know I will always love you, and that will never change. You know each one of us loves you, and would do anything to change what has happened. Even though you haven't left us yet, we all miss you already" Sarah told her "Here, I want you to have this. This way you will know that I love you, that I loved you, and that I will always love you"

Sarah pulled out her necklace, and wrapped it around Sophie's neck.

"It says together forever, and when you are up there, I want you to look out for me, and everyone else who loves you"

Sophie passed shortly after this. Leaving them all, but finally at rest. Her body laid there, at peace.


Comments

7/10

It's good, the writing makes you feel for the characters, the writing gives you the intended emotion, but other than that it's pretty generic. It's good though.

Thanks sawdust <3

Jason and Sarah wanted a threesome before Sophie passed.

they sure did, damn doctors and family wouldn't allow it though :(

9/10

Great story mate <3

Thanks lee :)

Feels like it lacks "Umph". It was pretty indeed, but the ending left me without satisfaction.

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ololololol richard91b gives good head

He does, i would tell him on his profile, but I am banned :D

Ha! Thats great. So where did you hear that I was gay?

Your great aunt Linda

To argue with a person who has renounced the use of reason is like administering medicine to the dead.
I fear not, I see not reason for fear. In the end we will be the victors. For though at times the flame of liberty may cease to shine, the ember will never expire
Tyranny, like hell, is not easily conquered; yet we have this consolation with us, that the harder the conflict, the more glorious the triumph.
Thomas Paine

kay.

faggot

Nobody.

I don't have a great Aunt Linda.

Then who the fuck was I talking too?

hey Jman although i didnt like your comment on my last 1 how bout u check my new 1 on 1 condicion though plz dnt insult gamer i want my 50th post clean ok?

I make no promises, cause you left a comment with horrible spelling.

I will read later, and if I read any comments from how ever many blogs you have made since my last comment that I don't like, I will personally turn it into a shit storm, kay?

ok( it starts raining poop) oh f**k

OLD PEOPLE BURNING OLD PEOPLE BURNING PUT YOUR HANDS UP

dang dude u have a really good profile your a police captain with a silver wistle gj

Thanks :)

COOL STORY, BRO.

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