Short, and to the point.
As short as this is, I actually enjoyed it a lot. Short, very basic story line, and smooth animation.
The storyline in this animation is what saves this cartoon. It is very funny, and very random. It is short, but thats how it is suppose to be. This type of storyline cannot be expanded, and it would cut away from the humour of the animation.
The graphics for this animation are not the best. They look to be quick sketches. Everything looked like there wasn't much effort put into them. An example would be the pigeon, you could have added a bit more detail to the pigeon, other then an outline and one solid colour. The background would be another example, although it is done, it is just a very basic sketch.
The sound of the flash is well fitting, The the background noises of being at a park helped set the scene, and it worked out well. Each sound effect used lined up well with each corresponding event. There was nothing played too early, or too late.
The only way I could improve on this flash is if there was more time spent on each drawing. It would just making things look more visually appealing, and it would be better to watch. Other then that, this was a great thing to watch, and I would like to see more from you in the future.
Your drawing style is unique, very creative, and is incredible. There was a lot of work put into minor details of the animation, which made it stand out. Examples of this are how you used several different shades of brown to make the title of the flash, how you used 2 different greens in the her eyes to make them look more real, how well drawn the seagull is, how you made sure that the clothes chest had nails visible etc.
Things about the scenery were drawn well, but i did notice somethings that could have been improved. The water scenes where you see the water moving. I think it would have looked a bit smoother if you drew in more basic water pictures, it would make it look less choppy, and more smooth.
Another thing is that you have conflicting winds. In the beginning, you see the flag blowing in the wind, towards the left side of the screen, but the clouds, as well as the water are all blown to the right.
One last thing that I noticed about the clouds, is that in some screens the clouds are staying perfectly still, and right after you have them moving. This is just another conflict with wind effects within the flash.
The background music of this animation is perfect. It fits in so well. It is this adventurous music, which in this flash that is what the main character is being set up for. There is no sound effects, but that is ok because it would have distorted the background music. You also drew in slides and made notes of the sounds taking place, which makes us know that you didn't forget about them.
The last thing I could suggest is that you add "Stop ();" into the actionscript on the last frame of the flash. That will stop it from looping.
Overall this is a great first flash, that is well drawn, and I can't wait to see more from you
First off, thanks Jamie. <3 I really appreciate the criticism and compliments. I agree that the water should have been more smooth, I will quickly change that in my next flash. The winds were such a pain in the ass I definitely started to slack off towards the end with them not moving and all. Those places where the wind moves one way and then another, were really thought to be direction and facing (if shes facing one way the clouds go right/if shes facing another they go another way) but I can definitely see how that could be misread as just not paying attention.
I'm glad you enjoyed the music, I actually thought of the flash after hearing the song, and made the scenes accordingly. While I wish I could have put sound, I really was just feeling the song and I didn't want to ruin it.
I don't have flash, so I can't insert script. x_x I wish it were that easy, I can't even figure out how to have a proper preloader or even buttons in Toon Boom Studio (what I use). There are little to no tutorials on it and there's no way I've found to add buttons or preloaders or anything. I could figure out how to stop the loop, though. That's a good idea ;)
Overall, thanks a lot. I appreciate the time and effort you put into that. <3
I now know the meaning of life
and it is you. amazing art, amazing music, just perfect.
GO BUY A PIG SO HE CAN EAT ALL THE SHIT YOU HAVE IN YOUR BRAIN.
this just just a magical piece of art. amazing art, sound and B
THE SKY IS BLUE
Kiss me like that, but don't shoot yourself like that, cause that would be messy, and i don't want to clean.
HAPPY BIRTHDAY LEANNE<33
Hope you have a good one<333
Have some cake, and birthday sex, on me :D
On you? The third wheel sucks.
Were no strangers to love
You know the rules and so do I.
This isn't something you make a flash about
this is a flash of just text and nothing else. this isn't something for flash, but iw ould accept it as a new post in your profile, or a post on the bbs, just not flash.
I fucking love you :):)
lmao that was the greatest thing i have ever seen lol i love your endings :)
this is easily one of the greatest foamy cartoons i have seen in a long time :) also i loved those squeeshy noises she made
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